Sunday, 25 September 2011

Second Campaigner Challenge - The Imago Test

I really enjoyed having a go at the last Campaigner Challenge so thought I'd try this one too. Here's the brief:

Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc.

The blog post should:
  • include the word "imago" in the title
  • include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity,"
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post.
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY!
Pretty difficult, but I couldn't resist a challenge. Here's my entry:

The Imago Test

I take my place alongside the other initiates so that the tips of my toes overhang the ledge.  The chasm oscitates ahead, a wide lacuna between two promontories, each studded with a black obelix. Stiffening, I turn to look at Marlo. He catches my eye and manages a weak smile. “We’ll be fine. We’re the chosen,” he whispers, but fear surrounds him like a thick miasma. How are we supposed to survive this?

The horn blows and Martha jumps. I watch as she plummets towards the sea, my heart racing, but then something explodes from her back - wings that reflect the pale sunlight like mirrors. I inhale sharply as she catches the wind and soars to the other side of the abyss, raising her hand in triumph.  Why has no one told us what we might become?

Marlo’s next, but this time I can’t look. I close my eyes. When I open them, there’s no sign of him. 

The priest stands beside me, his face bone-white against purple robes. “Time to take flight, daughter.”

Empty, I gaze up at the clouds just as a butterfly crosses the sky, a silverwing. Marlo’s favourite. In that moment of synchronicity, I fall.

32 comments:

  1. You used the words very seamlessly in this story. They fit perfectly. Awesome job!

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  2. That short story flowed seamlessly - no one could tell you were squeezing in such a random selection of words. Loved it.

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  3. Oh wow. Fear, hope, despair, and then the promise. Thank you for the last two wonderful sentences.

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  4. Very nicely done, made me want to read more! ; )

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  5. You even managed to use the difficult words without it appearing contrived. Good job!

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  6. I barely noticed the words and I love the concept you created for your story. I kind of know what happens, but I'd still like to know more about the world.

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  7. Very nice story, flawlessly executed. Well done.

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  8. P.S.: What number are you so I can vote?

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  9. Thanks for your kind comments. Cat - I'm #93.

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  10. great job! love this story of their initial flight!

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  11. I really enjoyed this one. Great use of the words. Well done.

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  12. You blended the words nicely. The story was well executed with a good blend of emotions following a pleasing ending.

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  13. Very cool. This was so easy to imagine both emotionally and visually. Mine is #29

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  14. This is beautiful and frightening at the same time. I love how you've ended this.
    Mine is #3.

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  15. Perfect use of the words, here. And the story captivated my interest. I'd totally read more.

    Great job, M.C.! :)

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  16. My goodness...where do you come up with this stuff?! Seriously. You are amazing. One of my favorite authors in this whole campaign. I hope someone really important recognizes that :)

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  17. Pretty neat! I love the imagination in it.

    The Write Soil

    Mine is #50.

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  18. That's a suspenseful, well-written piece that left me wanting more.

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  19. I love this one, so well crafted that the strange words disappear into the scenery without disturbing the flow. Fear and expectation perfectly blended. Mine is meant for fun and memories, #52. Followed your blog.

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  20. Thanks for all your amazing comments so far. I'm glad that you're enjoying the entry.

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  21. Aww, man! I want more. :(

    Great work! I'm a new follower. :D

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  22. Ah nice :) Love the feeling your words evoked. The picture matched perfectly too (which came first, the pic or your idea?!).

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  23. Oh, I want to know what happens to her! Love this!

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  24. You wove those words seamlessly and captivated me. Bravo!

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  25. Oh, that was lovely. Great imagery and wonderful use of the words. Good job!

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  26. That was lovely. I really like how thoroughly you can evoke a fantastical concept in such a short piece.

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  27. Blog awards for you!!! http://jessica-therrien.blogspot.com/2011/10/blog-love.html

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  28. Wow! Lovely imagery and very powerful!

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  29. An original piece with some beautiful writing. Great job!

    #189

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  30. Woot for this one. Clever and well written.

    Can't wait to see who wins this round in the campaign.

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